Tuesday, February 11, 2014

On a Dirt Road



On a Dirt Road

The letters have eased
to rust, the battered mailbox
with its heavy tongue
disgorged, the forgotten dirt
road that used to lead us home.




Poet's Note:  A response to Poets on the Page Mini-Challenge Day 1.  A Tanka...or my attempt at a Tanka.  Happy Poeting!  ;-)

9 comments:

  1. Oh, the tongue of the mailbox. That image hadn't come to mind at all and I have spent quite a bit of time with this image during the last few days. If you were curious, this view is off Snow Rd. I'm not sure what part of town you live in, but I have seen a bunch of surprising (and poetic) scenes on Kern County back roads recently. So glad you took on the challenge - I was getting lonely out here! :-)

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    1. I didn't realize you'd taken the picture yourself! I'm in the SW but do know Snow Rd...not to the detail of mailboxes however! I was actually downtown last Friday night, found myself walking in the neighborhoods a bit away from all the fuss...saw this amazing tree (I know...totally cliche...a poet who loves a tree) and found myself marveling at the tree, the intersection, the way the cement had broken away from it all...long story short....the unexpected poetry of Bakersfield. I'm seeing it more and more. Ok! I'm rambling, aren't I? Lol! I had fun with your prompt...thank you for that and for reading my response.

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  2. letters and the mailbox all forgotten! sigh! Loved your take on the prompt. :)

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  3. It's amazing how you personify every forgotten detail

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  4. Seems that you see this road as an end, not a chance for a beginning... Strong phrasing

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  5. I have really enjoyed people's responses to this prompt. Thank you for sharing yours!

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